Comments on: Critiquing Your One Sentence Summaries http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/ America's Mad Professor of Fiction Writing Wed, 08 Feb 2012 19:04:58 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.1.3 By: Camille http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4661 Camille Fri, 28 Mar 2008 06:55:11 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4661 A one-armed trapeze artist heckles a standup comedian with panic disorder into taking his place in a deadly high-wire showdown with a gang of obese elvis impersonators. :) *******sigh*********** A one-armed trapeze artist heckles a standup comedian with panic disorder into taking his place in a deadly high-wire showdown with a gang of obese elvis impersonators.

:)

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]]> By: Daan Van der Merwe http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4662 Daan Van der Merwe Fri, 28 Mar 2008 07:55:13 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4662 Thank you very much Randy! Maybe I should say "Despite his firm Christian believes, a lawyer vows ..." A Christian is not supposed to be revengeful and, as you have taught us in Fiction 101, a character with conflicting values is an interesting character. Yes, sadly alcoholic lawyers are indeed overdone. :-) Camille: LOL!!! Thank you very much Randy!

Maybe I should say “Despite his firm Christian believes, a lawyer vows …”

A Christian is not supposed to be revengeful and, as you have taught us in Fiction 101, a character with conflicting values is an interesting character.

Yes, sadly alcoholic lawyers are indeed overdone. :-)

Camille: LOL!!!

]]> By: Kristi Holl http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4663 Kristi Holl Fri, 28 Mar 2008 12:50:09 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4663 This is like a mini writing seminar on hooks and high concepts. Thanks for the hands-on teaching! This is like a mini writing seminar on hooks and high concepts. Thanks for the hands-on teaching!

]]> By: Gerhi Janse van Vuuren http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4666 Gerhi Janse van Vuuren Fri, 28 Mar 2008 15:05:29 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4666 Daan, You can also push successful until it becomes a liability. A workaholic lawyer...? Maybe he blames himself for being absent when it happened? Question: I should probably know this but, what is a high concept story? Daan,

You can also push successful until it becomes a liability. A workaholic lawyer…? Maybe he blames himself for being absent when it happened?

Question: I should probably know this but, what is a high concept story?

]]> By: Sheila Deeth http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4669 Sheila Deeth Fri, 28 Mar 2008 16:15:00 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4669 This is neat and very helpful. Thanks, Randy. This is neat and very helpful. Thanks, Randy.

]]> By: Iain http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4670 Iain Fri, 28 Mar 2008 16:32:09 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4670 I've recently picked up the snowflake method and have started writing some one sentence summaries, and blogging about the method. The critiques here highlight for me the importance that a single sentence can have in determining whether something is broken or not. I’ve recently picked up the snowflake method and have started writing some one sentence summaries, and blogging about the method.

The critiques here highlight for me the importance that a single sentence can have in determining whether something is broken or not.

]]> By: Livinus http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4671 Livinus Fri, 28 Mar 2008 17:59:53 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4671 Just today's installement from Randy and I've already learnt a lot. For example, Elizabeth, in your summary "A gay Air Force officer and a Catholic lesbian get married, and then she leaves him for her best friend." You seemed to have solved the problem. Imagine you say "A gay Air Force officer and a Catholic lesbian get married and lived together until she meets the officer's sister." More suspence? Just today’s installement from Randy and I’ve already learnt a lot. For example, Elizabeth, in your summary “A gay Air Force officer and a Catholic lesbian get married, and then she leaves him for her best friend.” You seemed to have solved the problem. Imagine you say “A gay Air Force officer and a Catholic lesbian get married and lived together until she meets the officer’s sister.” More suspence?

]]> By: Livinus http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4672 Livinus Fri, 28 Mar 2008 18:13:07 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4672 Sure Randy, I've added your link to my blog! Sure Randy, I’ve added your link to my blog!

]]> By: yeggy http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4679 yeggy Sat, 29 Mar 2008 02:41:07 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4679 Thanks Randy, the reason she andher parents are estranged is complez, so I'll have to work on getting my head around that in as few words as possible. will ther be an opperrtunity to post the revised sentence later? Cammille, if that ever gets published I'll read it. :-) Thanks Randy, the reason she andher parents are estranged is complez, so I’ll have to work on getting my head around that in as few words as possible. will ther be an opperrtunity to post the revised sentence later?

Cammille, if that ever gets published I’ll read it. :-)

]]> By: valerie http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4685 valerie Sun, 30 Mar 2008 00:01:27 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4685 Randy, you're going to be in Couer d'Alene when where why how? Please post...I'm not that far away and if you have a seminar I could go to, I'd be delighted. Or you could email me! ;) Randy, you’re going to be in Couer d’Alene when where why how? Please post…I’m not that far away and if you have a seminar I could go to, I’d be delighted. Or you could email me! ;)

]]> By: bonne friesen http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4687 bonne friesen Sun, 30 Mar 2008 00:54:05 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4687 Argh! I just got home from a week in North Idaho (close to Coeur D'Alene) with no internet access! I've been waiting for the one-sentence summary open audition since the one at the very beginning of this blog! Please add mine to the 53 already posted: Forbidden friends must reach the ruined Citadel to activate an ancient defense and save their land from invasion. Argh! I just got home from a week in North Idaho (close to Coeur D’Alene) with no internet access! I’ve been waiting for the one-sentence summary open audition since the one at the very beginning of this blog!

Please add mine to the 53 already posted:

Forbidden friends must reach the ruined Citadel to activate an ancient defense and save their land from invasion.

]]> By: bonne friesen http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4688 bonne friesen Sun, 30 Mar 2008 01:11:58 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4688 Maybe scratch "from invasion". Closer to the 15 word mark that way, and a little more punch. Maybe scratch “from invasion”. Closer to the 15 word mark that way, and a little more punch.

]]> By: Melissa Stroh http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4690 Melissa Stroh Mon, 31 Mar 2008 01:14:54 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4690 Hey Randy, me too Please! I just now was able to check my email and am in desperate need of help with the one-sentence summary. I'm terribly wordy and for me trying to sum up an entire story in one sentence is like trying to chug a gallon of milk in an hour. You might be able to accomplish it, but in the end you'll be sorry and have an even bigger mess to deal with. Okay, so maybe it's not that intense, but I got your attention right? So here it is: The life of an Irish farmer's daughter is altered through the deception of a nobleman and an ill-fated Viking raid. Hey Randy, me too Please!
I just now was able to check my email and am in desperate need of help with the one-sentence summary. I’m terribly wordy and for me trying to sum up an entire story in one sentence is like trying to chug a gallon of milk in an hour. You might be able to accomplish it, but in the end you’ll be sorry and have an even bigger mess to deal with. Okay, so maybe it’s not that intense, but I got your attention right?
So here it is:
The life of an Irish farmer’s daughter is altered through the deception of a nobleman and an ill-fated Viking raid.

]]> By: One-sentence summary — bonnefriesen.com http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4691 One-sentence summary — bonnefriesen.com Mon, 31 Mar 2008 02:07:12 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-4691 [...] summary Posted in: Uncategorized On Randy Ingermanson’s blog he is critiquing one-sentence summaries from his faithful blog readers. I’ve been waiting for [...] […] summary Posted in: Uncategorized On Randy Ingermanson’s blog he is critiquing one-sentence summaries from his faithful blog readers. I’ve been waiting for […]

]]> By: Lea Ann McCombs http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-5484 Lea Ann McCombs Thu, 08 May 2008 18:39:30 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2008/03/27/critiquing-your-one-sentence-summaries/#comment-5484 Randy, thanks for the great tips! I'm working with my agent on the perfect one-page and elevator pitch. I think it's harder than writing the whole novel! Randy, thanks for the great tips! I’m working with my agent on the perfect one-page and elevator pitch. I think it’s harder than writing the whole novel!

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