Comments on: Thoughts on MRUS http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/ America's Mad Professor of Fiction Writing Sat, 30 Aug 2008 00:31:50 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.1.3 By: Story Hack (Bryce Beattie) http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-544 Story Hack (Bryce Beattie) Thu, 03 May 2007 13:27:23 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-544 On the subject of "suddenly." This is something that I have have been trying to remove from my writing. I think Stephen King once wrote that "The road to hell is paved with adverbs." I guess it's common to think that throwing in that "suddenly" speeds up the pacing, but I'm thinking now that short-sentence (real-time) MRUs move the action along much faster. On the subject of “suddenly.” This is something that I have have been trying to remove from my writing.

I think Stephen King once wrote that “The road to hell is paved with adverbs.” I guess it’s common to think that throwing in that “suddenly” speeds up the pacing, but I’m thinking now that short-sentence (real-time) MRUs move the action along much faster.

]]> By: Leigh http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-549 Leigh Thu, 03 May 2007 16:42:13 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-549 I get 'suddenly', but I don't see the difference between 'before' and 'then'. They're both words that indicate that things happen in sequence, and in the rewrite they're still in the same order. It just changes the sentence structure somewhat. I get ’suddenly’, but I don’t see the difference between ‘before’ and ‘then’. They’re both words that indicate that things happen in sequence, and in the rewrite they’re still in the same order. It just changes the sentence structure somewhat.

]]> By: yeggy http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-550 yeggy Thu, 03 May 2007 23:35:23 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-550 'Finally, several people were interested in knowing who was outside that door in Yeggy’s piece. Me too! Thanks for clearing the suddenly and before thing up Randy. Who is that unseen knocker???' It's a YA fantasy and the POV character has woken up in another world. Who or what is outside the door? Guess you'll just have to read the book when it's published. :-9 Last night I was lying awake thinking about M and Rs and the segment I sent you, Randy, and 'suddenly' it all made sense. I could see it on the page and knew exactly what I could do with that fragment to make it sing. Thanks again. ‘Finally, several people were interested in knowing who was outside that door in Yeggy’s piece. Me too!
Thanks for clearing the suddenly and before thing up Randy.

Who is that unseen knocker???’

It’s a YA fantasy and the POV character has woken up in another world. Who or what is outside the door? Guess you’ll just have to read the book when it’s published. :-9

Last night I was lying awake thinking about M and Rs and the segment I sent you, Randy, and ’suddenly’ it all made sense. I could see it on the page and knew exactly what I could do with that fragment to make it sing. Thanks again.

]]> By: Debbie http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-590 Debbie Sun, 06 May 2007 22:47:56 +0000 http://www.advancedfictionwriting.com/blog/2007/05/02/thoughts-on-mrus/#comment-590 I really like what I'm learning about MRUs. I'm picking up good fiction and analyzing it for MRUs, which helps me write them better. One question. How do you maintain the sequence of motivation and reactions in dialogue. I can insert some motivation by observing what a character is doing, but it seems like it could become a little stilted to have an observation before every line of dialogue. I really like what I’m learning about MRUs. I’m picking up good fiction and analyzing it for MRUs, which helps me write them better. One question. How do you maintain the sequence of motivation and reactions in dialogue. I can insert some motivation by observing what a character is doing, but it seems like it could become a little stilted to have an observation before every line of dialogue.

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